Offer and email writing

Cold email copywriting that sounds like you wrote it

The emails that get replies are short and plain, and they're about the prospect's problem. Getting there starts with you and with what your buyers already complain about.

It starts with an interview

We ask you what you sell, who buys it, what they say on the first call, why they pick you over someone else and why some of them leave. The answers to those questions end up in the emails far more often than anything we could invent.

Research on what prospects complain about

People describe their problems in their own words when they complain. We look for those complaints about the kind of service you offer, and about the situation your buyers are in, and we pay attention to the phrases they repeat. An email that uses the prospect's own words reads like it was written for them.

Short, plain emails

Our emails are a few sentences long. No images, no logos, no links in the first email, no formatting. They read like a note from one business owner to another, because that's what they are.

Each campaign has a first email and a small number of follow-ups spaced out over a few weeks. The follow-ups don't repeat the pitch. Each one gives the prospect a different reason to reply.

Independent review

Before anything is sent, the emails go through an independent review. The writer is always too close to the draft. A fresh read catches the sentence that sounds pushy, the claim that isn't quite true and the question that's confusing. Then you read them too, and nothing goes out without your approval.

Paid versus free offer test

Some markets respond better to a direct paid offer. Others want something free first, like a short review or an audit, before they'll get on a call. We don't guess which one yours is. We send both to comparable parts of the list and keep the one that books more meetings.

Every claim in your emails has to be true. If you can't back it up on the call, we don't write it.